Poem- Untitled/Thoughts

jinxed · Intermediate User Joined: Mar 18, 2006 Posts: 298

It’s a personal poem I wrote but I don’t really know the styles.

Untitled

I feel so alone
all empty inside
living in another zone
I just want to hide

I can not trust;
even though it’s as if I must
I’ve seen worldly deceit
in which you have to retreat

Will this ever end?
when I can make amend
and there’s no more pain
but only happiness to gain

that’s what I’d like to see
it’ll be great to me
‘cauze it’s sad how the world is
And it’s what I could never dismiss.
End

de-vin · Newbie User Joined: Nov 01, 2007 Posts: 81

This would be good for a beat poem reading...like a rap style beat...

sevenroses · Newbie User Joined: Nov 03, 2007 Posts: 18

Good poem Nah should be techno Cool

jk

jinxed · Intermediate User Joined: Mar 18, 2006 Posts: 298

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Infected_Malignity · Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 5:44 am Post subject:

Techno? It should be fucking goa trance!
Nah, the rhyming is too good. Make that a hip hop song.

Though depressing, cool poetry. I like your style.

DO SOME MORE DO SOME MORE!

jinxed · Intermediate User Joined: Mar 18, 2006 Posts: 298

thanks for the compliment!