Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 12:46 pm Post subject: Re: Poem I wrote, when remembering my last school.
W1CKEDJO wrote:
All those years of hurt and blame
And tears that fell like pouring rain.
Words that cut like razor-blades.
Soul, black as the ace of spades.
You think that after all these years
I might forget and dry those tears.
Those memories, I can't forget.
So many things that I regret.
Perhaps I should have been a bi*ch
Like all the rest that liked to snitch.
But instead, I was too nice.
And for that, I payed a price.
People sneered and picked on me.
I put it down to jealousy.
I was smart, but they were sly.
Those bullies made me want to die.
And when I told my "friends", they said,
That it was all inside my head.
They wondered why I was depressed,
And moaned at me for being stressed.
Perhaps next time, you'll understand
That victims need a helping hand.
And if you all refuse to see,
Then don't expect f*ck-all from me!
Actually, WickedJo, I just read your poem and I thought it was excellent. It spoke so much from the heart. I could well imagine it being used in an anti-bullying campaign.
I wouldn't take negative criticism too seriously. Poetry is very much a matter of personal taste (eg I like Robert Frost and John Masefield but I never particularly liked Wordsworth or Philip Larkin). I really liked your poem.
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Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 10:02 am Post subject:
Holy crap!!!
This site should be a safe place to express yourself without having to worry about criticism. I honestly thought the poem was really good. Wish I could express myself like that!
well its not a good idea to post a poem about ur personal trials and then ask others to evaluate it. Its like an invitation to ridicule. You dont need their approval for ur poem becuase its personal and you wrote it. It will probably mostly have more meaning for you than others - unless it is very good and you have spent a lot of time on it. But dont stress, art is about expressing who you are and ur experiences, not creating masterpieces that others will love but that say nothing meaningful.
Oh and by the way sacrament sounds bitter and self righteous.....it was insensitive and idiotic of him/her to criticize your personal experience and even more childish to try and defend it-they messed up and now they wont admit it.....
Joined: Oct 30, 2007 Posts: 171 Location: United States
Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 7:36 pm Post subject:
apple85 wrote:
well its not a good idea to post a poem about ur personal trials and then ask others to evaluate it. Its like an invitation to ridicule. You dont need their approval for ur poem becuase its personal and you wrote it. It will probably mostly have more meaning for you than others - unless it is very good and you have spent a lot of time on it. But dont stress, art is about expressing who you are and ur experiences, not creating masterpieces that others will love but that say nothing meaningful.
Oh and by the way sacrament sounds bitter and self righteous.....it was insensitive and idiotic of him/her to criticize your personal experience and even more childish to try and defend it-they messed up and now they wont admit it.....
Oh and by the way sacrament sounds bitter and self righteous.....it was insensitive and idiotic of him/her to criticize your personal experience and even more childish to try and defend it-they messed up and now they wont admit it.....
No.
_________________ Alas! Our dried voices, when we whisper together, are quiet and meaningless as wind in dry grass or rats' feet over broken glass in our dry cellar.
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This site should be a safe place to express yourself without having to worry about criticism. I honestly thought the poem was really good. Wish I could express myself like that!