ANOTHER little poem of mine

Scottish_Player · Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2005 7:06 pm Post subject: ANOTHER little poem of mine

Not a good one but its ME

I feel myself going quietly insane
and iam calling out but no one hears my pain
They are all walking by with their heads held high
No one looks in my direction and it makes me want to cry

I just want some one to come and help me out
But i dont know how too get their attention
when i cant even shout
I sit here quielty hoping some good luck comes my way
but i dont know if i can do this shit even for another day Rolling Eyes

Marin · Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2005 12:51 am Post subject:

I like your poem, it flows nicely and I relate to feeling like you don't know how to connect to people, and then when you try, feeling like no one notices.

I think it would be good as song lyrics also

Carina33 · Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2005 3:18 am Post subject:

I agree with Marin..... that is nice! Like he says, it just flows and you don't get stuck anywhere, unlike in the poems I used to try to write. It's excellent because I can relate to it. It's excellent because it is not formal and boring.

Scottish_Player · Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2005 10:50 am Post subject:

Thanks for the comments, i was just feeling a little pissed off the other night and had to write something down as writing stuff down helps me let it out. Rolling Eyes

kattness · Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 12:13 am Post subject:

i like it.. makes me feel sad though - making people feel emotions is the making of a good poem Razz

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redlady · Elite User Joined: Jul 08, 2005 Posts: 1958

What are talking about - not a good one - i think it's great. It's honest, open and expressive. When you read it, it makes you feel something. All the things a poem should be made of. Very Happy

Hellraising · Intermediate User Joined: Apr 07, 2005 Posts: 260

It's good.