Poem i wrote

thugaveli · Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 11:24 pm Post subject: Poem i wrote

words of wisdom
tomorrows fine
the days ive faught
so hard ive tried

a loosing battle
so much worry
anticipation
im so sorry

one day i'll cherrish
when im gone
its too late
you be strong

im livin life
i also suffer
trapped inside
kept under cover

hard to explain
my feelings hurtin
i dont complain
livin a burden

the world i respect
the people i dont
for not understanding
i just can't cope

overwhelming feeling
hard to control
flaming inside me
this lifes so cruel

every morning
so much pain
im always down
suffering the same

i fake a smile
to keep you smilin
dont want you knowin
that im still cryin Rolling Eyes

redlady · Elite User Joined: Jul 08, 2005 Posts: 1958

I wish i had the ability to articulate my feelings in poetry form. I admire anyone with the ability. Your poem is evocative and i like the raw honesty of it - in that respect it is very free and expressive. Smile

jesuschristschild · Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 5:33 am Post subject:

red lady, just speak what you feel and make it into a poem

thugaveli...im guessing your a pac fan

well this poem was really deep, and i felt it from beginning to end, i really hope you get outta the darkness, i know how hard it can be

much love to you and i wish the best

you wrote wonderfully

redlady · Elite User Joined: Jul 08, 2005 Posts: 1958

jesuschristschild wrote:

Scottish_Player · Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 10:30 am Post subject: Re: Poem i wrote

thugaveli · Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 11:26 am Post subject:

Thanks guys

I actually hate poetry lol, but its a great way to express your feelings with a style

The times ive fell asleep and lost track over simon armitige in english class were countless

You should have a crack red lady, yove got nothing to loose and im sure your going to blow us all away with your vocabulary Cool

Yea im a pac fan, almost every word he spoke touched me
He was so powerfull and compassionate with words which is what i like about him

Scottish_Player

Ive always wanted to express that im only happy to keep everyone else happy so ye that was good to get out

Faded · Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 11:32 am Post subject:

Beautiful piece, very touching n' effective!!

Keep it Up! Wink