Joined: Dec 05, 2005 Posts: 113 Location: Singapore
Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 12:33 pm Post subject: *
i don't know what title or subject this one should have, so i only put a star ..it's a piece i just wrote..i think there's a grammatical error somewhere in here..
I used to have a light
that glowed inside my heart
even though it's not that bright
it can still sparkled in the dark
wherever i went
it stayed there inside
i treated it as a friend
as though it's heaven sent
The day it dimmed
I felt so lost and frightened
like a child
lost in a strange world
with faces unknown, staring cruelly
and the child only affords to walk helplessly
searching for the one she could trust
praying that this chapter won't last
Nowadays that light is really gone
i fight back my tears
i hide away my fears
and i can only pray
sooner or later
that light will resurface again...
Joined: Dec 05, 2005 Posts: 113 Location: Singapore
Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 12:50 pm Post subject:
yeah it's true expression is the one that's important but i think any piece of writing will be much beautiful to read if it's grammar is correct..
thank you for correcting my errors..
english is not my native language..so i need a lot of help in grammar and my vocab. is not that good either
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